It will be good to see your analysis/reflection on this article to see how you approached it. The headline sets up the scene well, but your intro is back to front — try to avoid starting with ‘scene-setting’, and instead go straight to the meat of ‘person X has said Y’ (even when starting with an anecdote, cut straight to description and action, not background).

The article would benefit from some thought on ‘showing’ vs ‘telling’, You spend a lot of time telling us what happened when showing (quoting) would be better. In short, it sounds like a description of something that you watched, rather than an interview that you conducted, or a story that you are telling. Try conducting an interview yourself to avoid this problem.

Finally, use the web writing techniques we explored in class — links, short pars, etc. Some good use of images and embeds though.