I think you achieve the main objective to mirror a genre structure (the review) — although you need to work on strengthening the beginning (typically this summarises the album — I’m not sure it does that, because it’s more about their live status)

You need to still employ the techniques taught previously, particularly web writing: there are lots of opportunities to link here (stories about Gervers leaving) and embed (individual tracks on Spotify, social updates). The pars need splitting, too.

Elsewhere, there are many phrases that should be hyphenated (I’ve highlighted these). In fact, I don’t think I’ve ever read something with so many of those! Four-piece, hand-crafted, etc.

Likewise watch out for parentheses: there’s a couple which aren’t needed (singer Yannis…, band Radiohead) and a couple where you open a parenthesis but forget to close, or vice-versa.

You have a tendency to overwrite, which can mean using words incorrectly. I’m not sure what “condensed entity” means here, for example. Do you mean a close team, a tight unit? That doesn’t make sense alongside the departure of a band member so you need to back up that claim a bit better, or abandon it (why make it at all? Are you just looking for ways to make them sound good!). Likewise “hiatus” is probably the wrong word — Foals have hardly taken a break! And do their tracks “evoke” a gig experience (in the listener’s mind)? Or do you mean “provoke” (at the gig itself)?

Try also to avoid cliches (“from strength to strength”, “packed punches”).